U nderfoot a thick carpet of hues
Trees bare as skeletons in the dark, shadowing over the young
U mber leaves, likes bits of burnt toast flying like a witch on a broom
M any colours falling to the ground only to be swept to the side
N ature is alive
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Hi Sophia
ReplyDeleteWonderful use of rich vocabulary and simile to create such a vivid picture for the reader. An effective mix of short and longer sentences to add variety.
A lovely piece of writing.
Keep up the great work.
Mrs Bennett
Hi Sophia,
ReplyDeleteI really like how each line connects and so your acrostic tells a complete story. So often they become a series of disconnected ideas. Use of the word 'umber' is clever-I recognise it from my set of water colour paints. How did you come across it?
Mrs Shaw
Hi Sophia Great work your poem creates and good picture in my head. I like the line 'Always have our hands on the rakes', its so true. Mrs Bayley
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